General Comments
Really lovely sketchbook! So much play and investigation!
The portraits in the moleskin are banging. Especially the girl with antlers.
Lots of play, I love your sketchbooks, very emotive.
Comment on the appropriateness, scope and ambition of the proposed outcomes in relation to the subject...
Strengths
Peer Reviewer a) You have a lot of really ambitious ideas. Based off all of the visual research you've done.
Peer Reviewer b) Ambitious in a good way. You wrote about which is the most shocking piece, make sure your product intentions line up with this.
Suggestions
Peer Reviewer a) Narrow down. You're still really broad, instead of going for some crazy, faux-historical artefacts. Why not do an anamilistic breakdown of modern life? Like what you were doing with your collage work? (my notes: I do love collage and found it really fun and experimental and also really cool getting the message across in that form and media... but this is not as appropriate to the final objects I want to create in response to and working along with my essay. I will stick to my 'crazy faux-historical artefacts' after all you never know there may have been a creature like this... may be 'true'-historical... history only started as Homo sapiens language developed into story telling communication soooooo you never know. Before this it was just 'biology' - context Sapiens, A Brief History of Humankind by Yuval Noah Harari).
Peer Reviewer b) I think it would be good to get yuoor list of products to a more narrowed down list. E.g. 3x wall paintings, 2x pieces of clothing etc.
Comment on the quantity and quality of visual investigation and development of ideas in response to the theme and subject...
Strengths
Peer Reviewer a) You've got absolutely tonnes of really high exploration visual work.
Peer Reviewer b) A really good quantity of work.
Suggestions
Peer Reviewer a) I think your development of actual ideas is either lacking, (incorrect) or not properly documented. (more likely! haha) Spend some time thinking more about how your ideas are going to work - will help the outcome. ( I agree, I definitely need to think about process more from now onward)
Peer Reviewer b) Watch the quality, maybe do a test piece in the aesthetic of your product to see how it works. Keep the focus and don't over complicate your idea, for example did you need to draw McQueen dresses? (my note: yes I did to show the incorporation of animal parts into a human garment in order to reclaim the power of that animal to our own advantage.)
Comment on the documentation of the conceptual and practical development of the work evidenced on the Blog...
Strengths
Peer Reviewer a) Like your visual work, loads of theories and loads of research.
Peer Reviewer b) Lots of research!
Suggestions
Peer Reviewer a) Needs to be better organised, some stuff isn't entirely clear. (I will go through now and try to clarify my points and expand on them where needed- in particular with any links that seem randomly placed.)
Peer Reviewer b) Where you have put links on your blog, expand on it more so who ever is reading it knows why it's there. Also add your Tumblr posts! Put more pictures on your blog of key drawings as it is very text heavy. ( my note: I really agree with this especially putting key pictures up, I think the fact ISSUU was used for most pictures had put me off putting single pictures up but obviously this is really important and good for visual evidence to back up what I am talking about in the text.)
Poverty aid in Burley is good for antique frames and cabinets etc (my note: good for a cabinet of curiosity type piece to hold the collection of the objects I make.)
Comment on the decisions regarding the production and proposal of outcomes...
Strengths
Peer Reviewer b) You have a good idea of what you are going to produce and propose.
Suggestions
Peer Reviewer b)It would be useful to be more specific - which media for which product.
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